The restoration of the UNSC

by Warwolff2003

Reach has Fallen and the newly promoted Captain Jacob Keyes has taken his small fleet and st course for Earth. However, this is not the Earth those in the UNSC remember. This is my version of a similar story by originally by Samsara Sage which was adopted by Ultimate Deathsaurer 2

8. Update 2

Restoration of the UNSC – Update

Hello everyone, because I went on a course over the weekend, I have been unable to finish the next chapter of the story. As such, I thought I should respond to all of the questions and reviews. Before I answer these questions though, I would like to inform everyone that this is my first time writing a fanfiction story that I am posting. I do appreciate the support and suggestions. Please keep sending them in. now back to the reviews.

The first of these that have not been answered are:

I would not say that the changes are a bad thing since the story will take place in the stargate universe and not halo however I remain sceptical.

Apart from the few faults that other readers before me have already pointed out, I will follow anyway

However, to start the chapters are too short, sloppy, and neglecting it, you feel that you want to go too fast, you lack precision, do not hesitate to put details, for example I advise you to go see the fanfiction " The First Movement of the Odyssey" by Crazy-88 apart from minor error and inconsistency it is really good.

I am waiting how you will incorporate the UNSC into stargate and incorporate the technology of the ancient Antarctic outpost with that of the UNSC (drone, sensor, control chair, hyperspace, outpost shield etc. ...) but the important thing is that it must remain credible and not far-fetched. That's why the version of Ultimate Deathsaurer 2 is really good, it's still believable because potentially possible, you wanted to make some changes but suddenly you made a little too much and too much.

Thank you for the suggestions, Chapters should be getting longer as the story continues and more detail will be coming with each chapter.

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You're telling more than showing, even in common facts that Keyes and Co. would naturally know and act on like Cole protocol, through Cortana. Stating damage to accelerators over showing it, etc.

MAC numbers upon damage; 3 vs 27, missed a 0.

Fight was detached, more like a report than scene. Slow your plot, no need to rush. Time skip if you can't.

I didn't notice the number discrepancy so thank you for pointing that out. For future battles and skirmishes, I shall remember to put the battle into the perspective of the people in the battle. Thank you again for the review and suggestions.

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Spartans would be priority for cryo, downtime isn't popular with them.

PoA had about 1000 crew, like most cruisers. Marines and other compliments aren't part of crews.

Chief's too personable, hasn't had Cortana long enough to be as friendly as shown.

Keyes' fleet would come out of system as their arrival would be unexpected and likely met with initial hostility.

Keyes and Halsey were largely detached at that point.

Suggest light reading similar fanfics (halo mostly, sg's usually easier to depict, if taken seriously) or lore videos(halo) to get a good general picture of involved parties and define the characters present.

The thinking for Halsey and Keyes was that after Keyes had saved her from a high-risk situation, she would be more personable towards him. The Spartans would have had to write their reports to ONI about the Fall of Reach and after an incident where a Spartan was lost because of faulty equipment, the Spartans now check their own gear. Chief shall be becoming less personable towards everyone but Halsey and the other Spartans until he has experience with them, E.g., Johnson, Cortana, Keyes among others. I do not believe that I grouped the Marines, ODSTs and other forces in with the crew compliment and if I have it is meant as an easier way to look at the numbers for the ships from Halopedia. Though it may not seem as though they are immediately hostile, the Goa'uld were initially hostile and were subsequently engaged by the UNSC.

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"Very, very..." would be assessed in units of energy, or compared to a high energy event, like "radiating seven times more energy than a frigate's/class-D commercial freighter's slip-space window".

"Investigate this..." just has to launch a probe. No need to move the whole fleet for that. Also has no idea what the window represents.

"The network..." their networks, if accessible. Spike may be an alien ship, making this near impossible.:

I was unsure as to the unit of measurement that the UNSC would use and by the time that this is posted, that error will have been updated. The update will also explain the reason why the fleet moved instead of the use of a probe and the network problem you have brought up.

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King of Summer 245, thank you for the suggestions for things that will need to be thought about. No, the UNSC will be taking losses to the Goa'uld and any later enemies that will arrive.

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"...viable option..." most factors that led to UEG's formation don't exist. Not viable.

"Leaders of..." entire political positions, not just leaders.

Nuclear missile concerns not as bad as shown; infowar and point defence go to UNSC.

"Will want to be completely in charge..." not a trend among them.

"...forming a world government..." would take years to decades to ratify a constitution for it alone, let alone jurisdictions and streamlining uniformity and individual capabilities. Not as unique, asteroid fields in Sol have more resources.

"...and the Master Chief..." debrief would be separate, he isn't an officer.

"Attack a held world..." have to find one first, in all of space.

"To Commander" 2-3 rank skips? His current rank posed no formal issues, why the promotion?

"Spartans ready to..." not what they were made for. Marine contingents maintain shipboard security and are a better option.

"Father..." odd from her, formal and pointed.

"Faith in Keyes..." most of Iroquois' command crew transferred to the Autumn with him.

"Threat of a Spartan team..." heavy handed, may cause problems later on.

"Excessive force..." most issues were with spartans, not other marines.

"Was an object..." detected from that far, with EM sensors alone?

When talking about viable option, I was referring to what they were able to do with the equipment available. An update to the chapter will fix the 'leader' issue. Information about the nuclear missiles will be given in the next episode. The same update will fix the 'Will want to be completely in charge...' point. The UNSC will have the charter, laws, and government system in their data banks somewhere. Most likely with the small group of legal personnel in the fleet or more likely Cortana. The debrief point is already solved in the promotion point. The point about attacking 'a held world' shall be update to having to find one as well. Th reason for the increase in rank is because the Spartan's will be having developments in the future which will require him to become a commander. Ship board security would have problems with the extra troops on board the ships. Also, the Spartans were originally created to crush human rebellion so this is technically part of what their original mission was. In the update Miranda will have a more relaxed attitude towards Jacob. The UNSC was known to be heavy handed when dealing with rebellions. Though his problem was with the spartans and not marines, he would still have hated anyone who was rebellious or mutinous. Cortana by this time would have tapped into the SGC and found out about the Stargate Program.

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I really enjoy your take on this story, as I have read the original one it is based off of. Never understood how the Pillar of Autumn could take on 2 Gould vessels alone.

Even with the fleet you show I feel more damage should have been sustained by the UNSC. Unknown if it is for upgraded Anubis Ha'taks, but if I remember their primary weapons hit with a yield of 200 mega-tons per blast.

Even at half or quarter, that is quite a bit of damage to resist. Keep up the story, would like to see where this deviates from the original.

I was unaware of the power of the Goa'uld weapons and as such will ensure that the information you have given me is put to good use. Unfortunately, due to the point in the story, I need the entire fleet to survive until sometime after the next few chapters. However, for this instance, the reason for the less damage in universe will be that they wanted to capture as many people as possible for their slave work force that the Goa'uld have.

Again, thank you everyone for the reviews and please keep sending them in so I can make sure the story is grounded in realism as much as possible.

Now that the review answer section has been completed, first of all, there is a forum now up with the same name as the story to input your suggestions onto about any advances with the story. I shall be posting a topic and will tally up the results of which you give about certain decisions that I will put may put into the story with the backing of the community. The first of these topics shall be named characters who may be able to be added, possible ship names, and side stories such as Halo Reach modified to fit in with the story.

Another thing to inform you about is the groupings for the Spartans.

Blue team

John 117

Fred 104

Kelly 087

Linda 058

Red Team

Joshua 029

Vinh 030

Isaac 039

Green Team

Malcolm 059

Grace 093

Joseph 122

Black Team

Otto 031

Margaret 053

Victor 101

Roma 143

Omega Team

Leon 011

Robert 025

August 099

Sword Team

James 005

Li 008

Carris 137

Gamma Team

William 043

Anton 044

Keiichi 047

Noble Team

Carter A259

Kat B320

Jun A266

Emile A239

Jorge 052

Six B312

There are also Spartan III fireteams Gauntlet and Onyx (formerly Red) on the Pillar of Autumn. These ten Spartans will need names. In the previously mentioned forum chat place a list of 10 names for the spartans. There will need to be a mix of both female and male names.

Posted 20/01/2023