Author's Notes

Finally, this harrowing journey has reached its conclusion. To all of you that read this, I thank you for reading this awful piece of English literary. I mean, calling it "literary" is an insult to the English language. It is that bad. It is very bad. I rate it -5 out of 5. But I am looking forward to improve on my god awful writing. To me, this project was quite hard to make. Mostly due to the fact that I am too bloody busy with course works and all those stuff you have to do to get that sweet pointers. Thank you again, for being a part of this really bad piece of writing.

I must also acknowledge the fact that the story is set in America, being not from America, I find it quite hard to write in the colloquially correct terms. So I am sorry if I made any dumb mistakes regarding the usage of certain words. Please do give me criticisms, it's very great for growth I heard. I'd appreciate it very much.

So umm, this commentary section is going to be a bit long, because I will be replying to all of the questions and comments, as of 04:20 28/10/2023 (GMT+1). Hopefully the commentary will not be too long though it'll be a bit stupid to have such a long commentary episode. I also will note on a few things in the chapters I made. Anyways, again, thank you for reading my atrocious work.

My Reply To You Guys (I'm sorry if I've been acting like an arrogant prick for not replying to you guys, I honestly don't know the format, I'm sorry)

To Mr png,

"Dude why Leni"

The reason I chose Leni as the first "sacrifice" among the sisters is because she has the most empathy. Empathy in times of terror, and confusion is a necessity, and when that certain amount of empathy is not met, the surrounding will turn into chaos. We are social creatures bonded by loyalty, love and respect for one each other, and once a large chunk of something is gone, it will be chaos. Also, Leni was the perfect victim. She's innocent, she's friendly, she's very nice, and when nice things get destroyed, we get enraged.

"Well isn't Lisa a genius can't she invente a useful gun ?"

Fun fact, I actually considered the idea of her making some sort of weapon to battle against the monsters, but it wouldn't fit in the narrative because they are inside a bunker, with a limited amount of surplus substances. Making a weapon from pure scratch is going to take a lot of time and a certain amount of materials, which they are lacking.

"Bloody hell", "Jesus", "Jesus Christ"

Aye.

"Is there really hope ?"

I don't know. IS THERE?

To Guest/s

"My God, this fic is so g**d! It looks so realistic!"

Thanks mate, god bless you.

"Well, that's a twist. I wonder if the NCAA was in fact the one who was responsible for the attack in Pasadena, as well as unleashing the monsters on the U.S., and they somehow managed to hack into the media to cover it up as a meteor strike."

So far, I haven't thought that far yet. The lore I set in isn't supposed to be concrete. It's up to you to decided who and what caused it, but I do have to say that they aren't "natural". Their bodies react to N,N-Diethyl-meta-toluamide (DEET) the same way synthetic fibres react to it. I hope that somehow answers a part of your question. winks

"Simply insane! It seems like the characters are really suffering from their trauma. That's a very difficult thing to do in a story. Congrats brah!"

Aww thank you! I hope you have a wonderful day.

To originalrationaluser

"I like how the plot goes, it seems quite realistic to me, according to what I have seen the events seem to have already happened and this is just Lincoln narrating his experiences, the thoughts that the albino has about murdering his family to prevent them from suffering leads me to to think that the Lincoln who is narrating is someone who has already lost much of his sanity.

Although somewhat short, they are very g**d chapters. Greetings author."

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. The thing about realism is that it is weird. Reality is more often than not, a very painful thing. And yes, this story is just Lincoln narrating his experiences. To whom he is narrating it, I don't know, could be his kids. From the first chapter we know he survived another 20 years. Who knows, maybe I'll write the continuation, maybe not. Time will tell.

The murderous thoughts about killing his family, is actually a weird part of the story, because, by the end, he just wanted to be with them, and by the end, that meant, dying. He himself wants to die. But he doesn't want to be alone. So he is kept in this limbo between two opposites. Extremes on both ends. From my experience in psychology, and my own experience in my personal life, I must say that that feeling is prominent, especially in traumatised people. It is a constant state of worry, and irrationality. I reckon'd by the time he is narrating the story, he was angry at the fact that he lost everything. That's why the story started with darker undertones, and as approached the end of his narrative, he felt the change he felt once before, and that change, changed his narrative. Thank you Originalrationaluser, you actually made me think deeply for a moment. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

"Well, I think that the fact that Lisa died from chemicals is due to her excitement and desperation at having found a very effective weapon against the creatures, which made her impatient and want to make more of these weapons very quickly by experimenting instead of searching. more alternatives considering that many times she has received damage from her experimental failures, of course this is just my perception of the facts, but this makes Lisa look like a deeper and more empathic character, because the emotion generated by hope caused her death, leaving the teaching of "he who despairs loses."

It is noted that Lincoln is one of the worst (not to mention the one who has the worst time) of the brothers, and he even developed schizophrenia and even tried to commit suicide, in addition to the fact that he imposed himself on being strong for his sisters despite being so young, I think we should go deeper into the psyche of the twins since not much exploration has been seen in them unlike the others.

Putting all that aside, you still maintain quality and realism. G**d job author, looking forward to the next chapters"

Lisa's death is a controversial part, it's like playing a game of tug of war with the left and right brain. One side wants to follow logic, the other side wants to continue bastardising the English language. A part of me calls it lazy writing, which I agree, but another part also said that, "We should kill that child, for she will bear thee misfortune in plot" or in other words: Put meaning to it. You're right, her death is caused by her excitement and desperation. I mean, excitement is good, but excitement causes accidents, and she's out of her nine lives. Her death is a bit of a turn off I must say.

One of the worst, yes. The worst? No. In my honest opinion, Luna had the worst time. Why we didn't see it much is because she wore her facade the tightest. She only took it off for a few minutes at most, and mostly through speech. She's still sane, but in times of great despair, sanity is something one would tend to hate. Regarding the twins, I don't really know, I kind of neglected them for the most part of the story. I'm sorry about that.

Also. Thank you again Originalrationaluser, I really appreciate your insights.

To Delquea

""Found an effective way to fight back? Can't have that now can we!"

Like seriously, that convenience only for it to be instantly reversed, in sorry but that was horrible timing and pacing."

It was horrible timing and pacing. I don't really have a comment for that not gonna lie. But thank you mate, I appreciate your insights.

My Personal Notes Regarding The Story

I got the idea to write this fic whilst listening to "Kill All Your Friends" By My Chemical Romance. I don't know if any of you lots heard it before, but damn it is good. To those who don't know, they're a rock band from the early 2000s, the lead singer, Gerard Way, wrote The Umbrella Academy.

Back to the story. To be honest, the story kind of evolved on its own before I started writing it. The first few drafts I made involved only Lincoln, and drug induced deliriums. But I figured that that would be rather depressing. No redemption, no nothing. Just shots of vodka, whiskey, and LSDs. Thank God it went through Darwin. So yeah. That's how it started.

Most of deaths could be avoided with a "rational" adult stepping in. Of course, that's something they don't have.