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Now here's chapter 23, I hope you enjoy it:
Chapter 23: Pursuit For Justice
I see Nisa running down the long wooden corridor, but guards pop out in a vain attempt to protect her, only for us to shoot them down. I manage to trip Nisa up once, by shooting behind her foot with my shotgun. Unfortunately she manages to get up and keep running although it is slightly slower.
We then move slowly in formation as Uni covers the rear, while me and Noire cover the front.
I see a soldier jump out from the left with a pistol, only for me to shoot him with my shotgun, knocking him over on his back. Two more of their pathetic soldiers then come out from the right with rifles, only for me to shoot them both with my assault rifle before they can even fire.
After which two more of them come out, one on each side of the corridor armed with disk launchers strapped to their wrists. They come charging in only for the both of them to be shot, by Noire's dual wield shotguns.
I also hear Uni firing bursts from her Uzi; this means that she's guarding the rear very well.
Despite the concern of being shot and dying, it never happens as we manage to shoot them first when they pop out; none of them manage to flank us as we are watching all sides, and we cover each other should we need to reload.
When we're about half way through the corridor we don't see as many people come out, in an attempt to take us down. I guess it's because they have no chance against us and choose not to sacrifice themselves. Why do they support someone like her anyway?
Surprisingly as we come to the end of the corridor, shooting what little of them there were. We find ourselves at a small dirty car park, and the outside to be pretty over cast. We see Nisa getting in a car and drive off. The car looks like the old Bat mobile only it's purple instead, with the letter N all over the car. The car includes an old fashioned siren which I remember from driving in Havana, in Driver 2.
Fortunately for us there is another car nearby, which we hijack by killing their troops that were about to get in. The car was in purple at the front and blue at the back, and it was one of the cars from Driver 2 Havana. Yes, the one which was usually white at the back and a different colour at the front, I'm guessing it's the Chevrolet 1958 Impala Sport Sedan. It didn't look in the best shape unfortunately, but as long as it drives and drives fast, it'll do.
I choose to get in the driving seat of this vehicle, while Noire and Uni sit in the back. Hopefully we'll be able to survive this car chase and capture Nisa.
I manage to drive the car surprisingly well despite there not being a PS3 controller. Because the car had a normal steering wheel instead; I was able to drive with just my right hand, with that ability I lean out with the shotgun in my left hand.
I chase Nisa at the exit to the warehouse which leads us to a highway full of cars. Thing is we're then pursued by a couple of Nisa's troops in their superhero themed mobiles, as well as one in front who is behind Nisa, attempting to protect her. One of them pops out from the car in front in the left side, only for me to shoot him with my shot gun. I hear a lot of gunfire as Noire and Uni shoot the pursuers.
Right now it dawns on us that we don't have much ammo left for our primary firearms, so we stay inside the car and wait for them to come to us. Unfortunately we're having to duck as they constantly shoot, the glass at the back is completely smashed as bullets are constantly entering our car. It is most fortunate that they just fly above us. I'm pretty sure we don't have the massive health we would have if we're awake. Out of the blue I then come up with an idea.
"Uni try and shoot one of their tyres if you can." I order Uni.
"Way ahead of you." Uni replies with confidence.
I see in the rear view mirror of our car, that she managed to cause one of the pursuers to spin out of control. This act causes various traffic to crash into them from behind. While it does concern me to see passengers affected, what choice did I have and who's to say they're actually real people, considering this is a nightmare.
Amazingly the pursuer in front no longer shoots at us, though if I wonder if it's due to a lack of ammunition.
Uni then aims her Springfield at the pursuer in front, more precisely the back tyres.
She successfully shoots one of them, but then the other pursuer from behind then drives around to the side. Fortunately I manage to shoot the driver with a few shots from my rifle, while Noire manages to shoot the passengers with her shot guns. They're all shot before they are able to do anything.
The pursuer in front is slowing down rapidly, so I manage to drive around before we crash into it. It's a good thing because this car unfortunately doesn't have seat belts, and I'm convinced this vehicle has limited maximum health, probably less due to this vehicle being shot so many times.
I see Nisa's car take an exit from the highway, and so I manage to head towards that exit quickly.
It's a good thing I noticed her car, because she managed to get far away due to her escorts. If there were traffic in the way we could have lost her, and there's no mini map in my vision or a pointer to her car. Thing is though she is still faraway and I notice the exit leads us to some industrial buildings on either side.
Uni takes the initiative as she uses her Springfield once again, and shoots one of Nisa's rear tyres.
In the distance Nisa's car is swerving left and right, as that shot tyre has caused her to lose control.
Note: Readers please listen to Cod 6 Favela Tension while reading this bit:
"OK guys, let's get her for what she did to us." Uni rallies with passion.
"Yeah she's our only lead on the mind control, we need to capture her alive." Noire adds.
"Yeah she's probably our only ticket to Neutralland." I finish.
Eventually Nisa ends up crashing her car at a wall, which is around a corner. Fortunately her swerving has slowed her down, allowing us to gain on her. She gets out and legs it to our right, eventually we get there and get out.
"She's gone through the alley." Noire calls out.
"Uni go for a clean leg shot. Non-lethal takedowns only." I say to her.
Nisa then falls over on her front.
"She's down." Noire confirms.
Suddenly I could hear a dog barking a lot.
I look to see a German Shepherd with a piece of meat next to it, wearing a general's helmet for some reason. I also see a block of wood next to the dog, as well as a bar of soap with a price tag on it.
It turns out it was trying to warn us, as then some guys with guns came out to protect the super villain of evil.
The enemy troops have purple hair, and are wearing purple t shirts with the Neptunia logo on it. They also wear purple jeans with some of them wearing cardigans, although their clothes look scruffy, dirty and even ripped. Their weapons are more advanced though as they consist of a couple of P90s, a couple of Mini-Uzis, a Barrett 50 Cal sniper rifle, a Spas12 shot gun and an M4 Carbine assault rifle.
It makes me wonder if they're there to give us their guns, as they'll prove to be useful in our quest to bring Nisa to justice.
We hide behind a nearby dumpster, as those guys start shooting at us, trying to taunt us with various phrases. Fortunately we're behind cover so none of their bullets hit us, the bullets do fly above us though.
Luckily they stopped firing eventually, so we're able to shoot back. They just stood there so they became easy pickings for us. Sadly though Nisa has gone.
We rush to the dead bodies, we'd move in formation but our ammo is low. It's important we get those weapons before facing any more enemies.
I then take the Carbine and Spas; Noire takes the P90s and Uni takes the Barrett and Mini-Uzis.
"Ah finally a weapon worthy for me, it's future proof and there's 2." Noire comments sounding rather happy.
"It goes with your hair." I say to Noire.
She giggles just as Uni is pleased with her newly acquired weapons.
"Heh heh, Uni's got some Mini-Uzis and my favourite weapon of all time the Barrett 50 cal." Uni says while smiling.
We then look around to see that the alley leads us to a favela, I believe it's a favela, it could be slums on a hill for all I know. What's strange is that this favela looks familiar, I remember it from Cod 6. The sky has changed as well as it's now sunny with the occasional white cloud.
"Oh no there's no sign of Nisa anywhere." Noire says with concern.
"I reckon she's in this favela somewhere, let's punch through it we'll get her." I say to my sisters.
I say this because I believe we're in some linear game now, and if we play through it we can capture Nisa. Yeah this place definitely looks familiar and hopefully I can predict where they'll ambush us.
As we approach the favela there are loads of civilians standing around, there are plenty of buildings coloured in different shades of purple and pink. They all look old though and are in need of repair. There are plenty of windows without the glass and there's graffiti all over them. Most of them don't even have adequate roofs, and I can't begin to imagine to know what the sanitation is like here. There are even a couple of purple cars that are really rusty, and are clearly in no shape to be driven. Is this what Neutralland really looks like?
I must say at least it's more realistic. It never made sense how the Planeptune in the series looked rather nice and futuristic with no problems, despite the CPU never doing any work what so ever. Not only did it made no sense but it made me disgusted with how they made Planeptune the best looking, it was such a contrast compared to Lastation with how terrible it looked, despite the CPU being such a hard worker. I'm just pleased that here it is the other way around.
But none the less it does bring me grief for the civilians, that are forced to live here under the tyranny of their rulers. I doubt they even have basic human rights. What squalor, I wouldn't be surprised if this place is full of disease.
As hard as it is I try to put these horrific thoughts out of my head, despite the fact that I can still see this dump. I then approach the poor innocent civilians, and start shooting my gun in the air in an attempt to get them away, so I don't kill them by accident.
"Get out of here guys! Get out of here! We don't want to kill you." I yell to them.
They panic and run screaming their heads off, just as we want them to.
"Please leave, I do not wish for you lot to die.
One day I'll rescue you lot from your so called leaders. Please get out of here before they kill you." Noire speaks with passion and emotion for those poor people, who are trying to run away from the carnage in panic and fear.
More of the same troops come out, I think they're Neutralland soldiers. They come out everywhere from roofs to windows to outside. They're armed with FN Fal rifles, some AK47s, Scorpion submachine guns, mini Uzis, RPD light machine guns and M1911s, and they all start shooting at us. We then hide behind the broken down car.
Eventually we're pinned down as a lot of bullets hit that car. Luckily Uni manages to pick them off one at a time with her Barrett 50 cal. Near the car I see a nearby house with a glass less window.
"Cover me guys, I'm gonna make a break for this house." I tell Noire and Uni with my Spas in hand.
I rush to that house and successfully reach the outside of the house, despite being shot at. After vaulting over the glass less window I see one of the soldiers there, and so I shoot him quickly.
I turn to my left to see a very basic bedroom. There's just a bed with its mattress not on the base of the bed properly. I expected for there be a very horrible smell here but there isn't, perhaps it's down to the physics of this nightmare. Which I suppose is a good thing as it'll probably reek of waste, urine and dirt. I then hide here and wait for Noire and Uni to come in.
It's rather chaotic as I can hear the soldier's guns, and their orders being barked out. A couple of soldiers come into this house only for them to be shot down by me.
I see Noire reaching this place, running as she manages to avoid being shot from the endless bullets being fired her way.
"It's awful those guys are killing their own civilians." Noire speaks with frustration.
"Even more so that we can't help them. All we can do is solve the brain wash problem but what if they're all dead by then?" I speak with similar anger.
"I know." She says glumly.
"Don't worry Noire, I know you're doing your best." I say to her trying to cheer her up.
Noire cheers up after I say that to her. I must admit it does sound strange, considering I thought that the point of these dreams is to try and make out we're bad. Instead they're proving themselves to be bad by killing their own people. Maybe we've managed to expose their true colours.
I see Uni reaching this place as well, again like Noire rushing inside.
We then look around inside this house to find that there is only a kitchen unit. This kitchen if I can call it that, consists of a cooker, a sink and a small rusty fridge. There's also a table and a chair, that's it. All there is to this house as well as the pathetic excuse of a bed.
We all look outside to see lots of them shooting at this house, from rooftops and from glass less windows of their houses. For a short time we manage to kill a good number of them, as their positions offer no protection to their heads or torsos, which we shoot them at. Despite being heavily outnumbered, we manage to take them down due to superior tactics. They're also distracted with shooting some of the civilians that are trying to escape. As much as these murders bring me grief, I can at least say they're not in vain.
Soon we make a break for it as we go to another house, which is so small that there is only a bed and a sink in one room, which is not even sheltered well at all. There were a couple of guys there, but Noire took the both of them out with a hail of bullets from her P90s. I expected to be surrounded again but while there are some soldiers, there doesn't seem to be as many of them, as most of them are on the ground rather than on rooftops, some of them are Nisa's troops. I hear their distinctive annoying phrases like:
"The place is in peril can Nisa's troops protect it?." And
"Those dastardly villains have wiped out much of the citizens here."
The last one I found to be a joke considering they're the ones that did it. They advance to our location but we manage to kill them off. What amazes me is that we have never been shot once, despite a lot of bullets hitting our location. After a short while we believe we have cleared the area, so we then go back to the first house we went to. But then we go down to where there are some of their troops positioned in a house, some distance away. We hide behind one of the slums for cover.
Uni manages to take them out with her Barrett 50 Cal one by one very quickly. She even shoots someone hiding behind a door, despite the fact that there are a couple of civilians in the way. I find her sniping skills to be very impressive indeed.
After the coast being clear, we rush to that house killing a few of their pathetic excuse for troops inside.
We leave the house only to encounter some stairs. We go up them which leads us to an alley with a football pitch, to our right there's a fence in the way. Suddenly there's a bizarre looking penguin with wooden pegs for feet, which has a similar appearance to Prinny from the Disgea series. It's making different noises as it's leaning on the fence. It's in black and looks quite menacing as it grunts loudly.
Due to gut instinct I shoot it in the chest with a hail of bullets from my Carbine, the creature then falls on its back dead.
"I'm familiar with this place I don't think they'll be anymore civilians now, keep pushing forward we will get Nisa and bring her to justice for what she's done." I say loudly to Noire and Uni.
We advance slowly down the alley, only for more soldiers to come out on the roof tops. We manage to take them down, but then we retreat a bit hiding behind a dumpster, as I have a gut feeling another one of those Prinnys will come. I was right but I managed to take it out with my Spas 12. After that we wait a bit, but nothing happens.
"OK let's go, be careful everyone this is their terrain and they know it very well, check your 6s guys." I say to Noire and Uni calmly.
We then go up the hill around various houses which now have multiple stories only for more of them to come out from rooftops, fortunately we're able to take them out.
As we go up a hill, up some steps only to find the passage ways becoming narrow.
"Diamond formation guys! I don't want to be flanked!" I order calmly.
Noire watches my side while Uni watches my back, as we look for enemies that try to ambush us.
Despite the fact that there seems to be plenty of routes we can take, many of them lead to locked doors so we take the only route we can go, taking out any ambushers along the way.
Eventually we get to another accessible house: It's a bit better than previous ones as it has a table, a couple of chairs as well as a fridge and kitchen sink, plus a cooker. But that's all in one room and the furniture in the room is old and rusty full of decay. There are some stairs and we all go up them, which leads us to a basic bed with some old tatty pyjamas on them. There's a window and door in this room as well. A lot of them start shooting at us in this room though.
We have to duck once more below the window, as the bullets create lots of holes in the walls. Uni goes prone and crawls to the door, after some excellent shots from Uni they stop shooting at us.
"Thanks Uni." Noire calls out to her.
"No problem." Uni replies as she stands up, and comes back to us reloading her Barrett 50 cal.
Since the coast is clear we leave the house and carry on past the buildings. We then go up some more stairs, and go right around a house only for more of them to come out on the rooftops.
That time we didn't need to take cover as we shot them before they could react, causing them to fall quite a long way to the ground.
That being said more of them come out giving us trouble briefly, and it does make me wonder how many more of them there are that are willing to throw their lives away, just to postpone Nisa's inevitable capture?
"Guys I see a ladder let's go up it." I order calmly.
"OK we'll cover you." Uni agrees.
I rush to the ladder, fortunately there was no one there to shoot me. But I can hear them panicking as they have lost a lot of their troops, which pleases me to know that we could be getting close.
When I reach the top it turns out I'm in another house like the one before, but this time there is a tiny old fashioned TV as well on a table. I see dead soldiers that have been shot by us. Noire and Uni then climb up the ladder as well.
Outside the house is actually a street complete with a road wide enough for cars, but there are a lot of troops shooting at us again through windows and rooftops.
My CPU engages them while my Candidate heads to another house on our side of the street, I decide to cross the street and go into another house where most of them are. The house I enter is more like a terrace, but it's under construction as I manage to flank them. They didn't know I was there and by the time they saw me arrive there, it was too late they're dead.
Noire and Uni then follow me as the area is clear. As we head down the street we turn left to find Nisa climbing up a ladder on a tall building.
To be able to see her running away cheers me up, as it's now easier to track her down. It's just the matter of catching this villain.
"Noire, I've got Nisa in my sights. I can go for a clean leg shot, we can end it here." Uni suggests.
"Negative not unless we carry her with half of these guys at our backs. I need her unharmed." Noire says.
"Nuts, OK roger that." Uni responds.
As Nisa climbs up to the rooftop some of her troops fire at us, only to be shot down by us. We climb another hill and go around to find some stairs by our left, which leads to the building under construction. We go up there where we're surrounded by bricks that have been laid down, as well as piles of stone bricks; we hide behind them for cover.
More of them take shots at us from the front, but they die by us sooner or later. With the coast being clear we head over the rooftops, consisting of wooden planks and sheet metal. We also find ourselves walking over planks that act as a makeshift bridge from one building to another.
After crossing over the rooftops we reach the ground again as again we go uphill, taking out the enemies that we encounter. Suddenly I see Nisa head into a building nearby, I head into that building as well in pursuit. It's appearance is like the other houses but it is fairly big, this must consist of multiple homes. She runs up the stairs but so do I, even though she runs very fast I do too, and it pleases me to know I can keep. After going up a flight of stairs I do as well. Wherever she goes I go.
She goes up every flight of stairs in which there are a few, she then heads to a room and onto a balcony with no walls. I manage to close the gap and now I enter the room, and I have her cornered.
Now she's mine, she's ours. It's time to find out what she knows and what her motives are for her crimes. Finally after this chase we finally succeed, and hopefully we can find answers to some of our questions. Hopefully at the very least we will have justice served.