Twilightiger1602:
Wait a minute, what the hell!? Tohka got a near perfect score in HOUSE OF THE DEAD!? Damn! Didn't take her for a massive Gamer-girl... probably rage-quit at The Magician. That old bastard is always a pain to fight.
Anyways, for the sake of clarity, in the Ars games, Marina was originally a malevolent A.I. created by Wescott to invade Fraxinus' systems and destroy it from within while everyone was testing the virtual reality system. However, due to interacting with Shidou and Maria, the latter being the main system personified after it was affected by Marina, both of the Ars sisters began to grow beyond their respective programmings and falling in love with Shidou enough for them to willing help him destroy their sephira crystal to stop the system from killing them all, at the cost of their own lives. They became so popular that, much like Rinne gand Mayuri, Tachibana ended up integrating them into canon in the form of A.I. MARIA and the Nibelcole.
Like I said, in that context, the closest you'd probably get to saving the Nibelcole is if you integrated the Ars storyline into your story and have Mikey find a way to save Maria and Marina.
Now, onto the chapter itself, I definitely enjoyed the opening with Kurumi and her clones giving Michael a dressing down in preparation for his redo date with Kaguya. Really showed off the nigh impeccable chemistry between the two; showing Kurumi at her best at being a tease, while also showing that Mikey can take as much as he can dish out... on top of being a good follower of the Kazuma Satou School of Gender Equality and putting his foot down when needed lol.
Ka(u)zuma: "I yearn for for true gender equality. I have no patience for one who talks about female privilege when it suits them, and then complains about someone 'not being a man' when it's convenient."
Anyways, for the date itself, it's mostly a retread of the last one, except Kaguya came prepared and the two of them actually went to a relatively decent restaurant, and paying a second visit to the arcade where they discover a pair of twins fighting over a game of House of the Dead... which totally doesn't remind Kaguya of how she and Yuzuru used to fight, lol.
After that, we cut to see a now fully materialized Mayuri, now stuck inside what amounts to a containment room just to prevent her from disappearing again. Shows how much time has passed since that fateful day, and while I understand the reasoning, her current situation still kinda sucks all things considered. Better than what happened to Rinne and fading into nothing... come to think of it, I wonder how exactly that whole Eden situation went down with Michael in the driver seat?
Following that, we get to the one part of the story I was dreading; one of the spirits figuring out Michael was thinking about leaving japan. Now, a part of me felt that it was inevitable that at least one of the other girls was going to figure things out, but I was pleasantly surprised to see Kaguya put two and two together when she asked Mayuri. The ensuing outburst from her that followed while Michael spilled his guts out was equal parts sweet and tearjerking. I'm not going to lie, whenever she isn't being a try-hard Chuuni, Kaguya can be very passionate and endearing in her own right. Top that off with the flashback of the Twins arc, and Kaguya giving Michael a much needed slap in the face made he appreciate her character a bit more.
As for the spicier content of this chapter, it was just as great as the previous ones, though I will give extra praise to the attention to detail on it. Given that Kaguya is much more lithe compared to his previous liaisons with Tohka, Kurumi and Miku, Mikey needed to change up his strategy on the fly so he doesn't end up making her uncomfortable and kill the mood, showing that despite his previous experiences, he's still a total newbie when it comes to the art of love-making... a fact that I'm sure Yuzuru appreciates right now XD.
Lastly, while it was short, I definitely loved that little bit with Moegami (New-timeline Origami) sneaking up on Michael and Kurumi having a rather suggestive conversation... only for the poor girl to suffer what amounts to a panic attack at the end when she sees Kurumi again. Funny, yet foreboding at the same time... wouldn't be Date A Live without either of them.
Welp, that's all I got. See ya when Yuzuru's turn comes... and I can already tell what she'll ask Michael when the time comes. Twilightiger out.
Bakuganman: Yup. Tohka's a massive gamer girl. So massive she destroyed nearly every machine in the OVA, which was what that whole thing was referencing lol. I'll look more into the games, but thanks for the general gist of them. But if I can skip down to the Eden thing for a sec… to be completely honest, I have a beginning and an end already figured out. It's the middle that's mainly the issue.
If you know, you know, but on the chance anybody reading this doesn't, Rinne's game has a different branching paths and multiple endings with of course one true ending. I haven't decided if I'm just going to have Michael begin the situation and then use exposition to fill in the middle, or overclock it and try to get each girls endings which unlocks the true ending in the official game anyway.
"You should ask Michael Pelham! He is an advocate for true gender equality!"
Figured that opening scene with him and Kurumi would get ya. Her and Mikey just can't stop going at each other, and even during the small bonus scene. And yes Kaguya basically began a new game plus, yet she still didn't receive enough skill points during the main campaign for her and Michael to beat the smaller twins… so sad.
Kaguya was one of the first to figure it out, and not to spoil, but she certainly won't be the last either. While I'm not gonna reveal that order of appearance, I figured it was necessary for them to eventually learn the truth. Some will take it better than others, but it will obviously bring them closer. Poor Kaguya took it pretty hard, but she got a special present after it, and your probably smart enough to figure out how and why Yuzuru acted the way she did at the end.
Guest:
First up, I'm honestly loving this story even if it is out of order atm. I especially love the lewds as well, been a while since I read good ones. Tohka's, Kurumi's and Origami's were my favorites. Miku's was hot too, but then again so was the most recent Kaguya's turn… can't decide between those two, but Kaguya's weak point being her neck does make sense to me. There were so many things I wish I can do to that slender body…
Now as I was leaving this review, I noticed the person below me Twilighttiger said he wasn't really a fan of the last chapter with Mayuri and Niclbol… while I can see the issue with the latter, Mayuri was fine. Being a mix of six spirits adds some complexity to her, but it's ultimately your decision.
Still itching when the story is fully posted!
Bakuganman: I suppose this is a response to Twilightiger's last review. I do appreciate your opinion as well, plus I'm glad you liked the lewds. To help you out though, if I had to make a choice between Kaguya's vs Miku's lewd, I'd say a mixture of both. Miku's got a certain set of assets to her, while slender bodies can also have their own advantages. Lifting a girl up by her legs though? That's why I'd rate Kaguya's a bit higher, at least based on what I'm feeling right now. Maybe tomorrow I'll want a pair of marshmallows stuffed in my face.
Guest (chapter 1):
Another garbage fic. Not gonna bother reading it because I'm a retarded npc who has a small dick and lives in my moms basement
Bakuganman: …
mrmisterman:
Rereading the past chapters, I really like how you included Hiroto Ai Mai and Mii in the know about Michael's job dealing with spirits, how Kirumi was sealed early, how Tohka actually assisted Michael with the triple date dilemma and a lot more, these little subtle changes in the canon without completely changing the course of the plot is always a treat to see
Bakuganman: Been a while since you checked in. And you reread everything? That makes me happy, bro. I appreciate you enjoyed my take on the series. I got plenty more surprises in store, and after Yuzuru's promised lemon is posted, you won't have to wait much longer for the full version.
Date A Live: Son of Westcott - Official Trailer
You think you know Date A Live…
(canon Date A Live characters pop up for a few seconds, with some creepy music)
You think you know Westcott…
(Westcott himself pops up for a few seconds, creepy music increases slightly)
But you don't know…
(creepy music intensifies…)
His son.
(creepy music abruptly stops.)
Aii: (in middle of a hand raise) I have a question for him. (Lowers hand) If your American, how come your not morbidly overweight from all that processed food?
Mai: Yeah, and how have you not pulled out your phone to complain on Twitter every 5 seconds?
Mii: That's so lame.
Michael: Well; nothing to teach this class.
Coming in 2024!
Michael: You've got literal bags for eyes, ma'am.
Reine: I haven't slept in over 30 years.
Michael: (hesitates with his response, trying to be nice) … Need a new mattr- (Kotori slaps him) OW! WHAT?!
Starts a brand-new Date to remember!
Hiroto: You act like your life's the worst thing in the world, Mike. You live with 10 dream girls that don't wanna be around anybody else but you.
Michael: (looks at him as if he just said the most stupidest thing on the planet. His voice cracks on his response) … EXACTLY!
Staring Westcotts mysterious son, Michael Pelham!
BONK!
Freya: oooooooh. Hate this section of the lab, always dim-lit… (realizes she flew into and landed on top of Michael) GAH! I'M-SO-SORRY!-SO-SORRY! I was just looking around, I heard some noises, and… (really takes a look down at Michael and leans in closer to him, Michael couldn't help but slightly blush, and she responds with the most nonchalant expression on her face) Wow, your really cute.
(Some of the Spirits immediately react to her statement. Tohka especially with her fists balled up and cutely growling.)
Critics call it the number #1 fanfiction, on the platform!
Miku: Last one! Promise!
(either completely ignoring him or just blowing him off, and reaching over to get another dress, this one yellow and it did look pretty… Then she looked down at it… and back at Michael… that look on her face… he could swear he saw horns grow out of each side of her head, with evil 'mwahahaha' laughter echoing in the now underworld-fiery background…)
Michelle (Michael): … no… No… Miku, no! Stay back!
(Miku blatantly ignored him and darted into the fitting room without his consent before shutting the curtains behind them. Good thing too, for now the shop assistant could not see the carnage being committed behind it, though she still stared at it in shock. Whatever was going on back there caused the curtain to keep flapping and the fitting room booth to rock back-and-forth as if they were in some kind of cartoon, which also caught the attention of other customers.)
Featuring New Locations…
Michael: Tohka. This is not Hawaii. We're in the Key West.
Tohka: Then where are all the keys?
(Michael facepalms)
Kurumi: Ya know, It's hard to imagine we're here other than for you to see us in some swimsuits… (Michael is shown slowly removing his hand from his face, looking at Kurumi, the water, back to Kurumi. Then slowly smiles at her, causing Kurumi to loose her own slightly quicker. The camera now faces the water so we can't see the group anymore) No. Michael! MICHAEL STOP! DON'T YOU DA-WAAAAAAH!
SPLASH!
New Enemies…
Kaguya/Yuzuru: Raphael! El Kanaph! (After combining their powers, they prepared to unleash they're most powerful attack)
Beelphegor: Me-OOOOW! You call THAT a bow and arrow?! (With energy gathering in her hands, she forms a purple metal bow and arrow, but not at as large as Kaguya's and Yuzuru's fused Angel. It was still similar in shape. She then loaded it with an arrow from the quiver on her back, which glowed with energy when it was loaded, firing at the same time the Yamais' did.)
BOOM!
And a whole new mystery to unravel.
Michael: I know it sounds crazy, and again, please don't take this wrong; but when I go near her, I (mental image of Reine forms looking back at him)… I feel this pain. It's like… sorrow… regret… shame… all rolled into one… I can't really explain it; but it feels like these emotions… aren't even mine…
(Kerubiel's Eyes open for an attack before launching them.)
Michael: I don't know who you think I am, okay?! I'm just a guy! A guy who can absorb Girl Power through a smooch!
Mayuri: (her voice speaks over the other Spirits fighting Kerubiel) There must always be a Vessel, Michael… Your the Inheritor… (her voice now speaks over the other Spirits fighting Rinne's Tree's roots) the one who will restore and maintain the balance between our worlds…
With some steamy scenes, of course ;)
Michael: (feels a sudden new sensation on his back. While it was soft, it felt a little too soft to be a washcloth…) Y-Yuzuru… d-did Origami put you up t- oooooh! (Michael had to force his mouth shut. Not only did Yuzuru start "cleaning" him again, but she was also gasping right into his ear while doing so… was this really happening?!)
Yuzuru: Ah... Ah… Q-Question: … You feel stiff all of a sudden. Do you not like it?Origami said you'd like something like this.
Michael: (speaks with clenched teeth) I'm gonna fold her into one…
Dating never stops in…
Aii: So… all those things. Tohka fighting against that ball-kanju-thing. All of (takes a few seconds to look around the room and then pointed all over, mentioning both the Natsumi thing and everything else before that) … This. Was because of Aliens?
Kotori (child): We're NOT aliens! We're Spir-!
Michael: (playfully slaps a hand over her mouth to shut Kotori up) Yes. Exactly.
(The trio and Hiroto look absolutely shocked, though Mai broke the silence)
Mai: … How'd you deal with all of that?!
Michael: I'm lame like that, I guess.
Date A Live: Son of Westcott!
Origami (child): (raises hand) Daddy. I have to go potty.
Michael: (decides to ignore the fact that Origami called him daddy again, despite how many times he requested her not to) You do not have to go potty.
Origami (child): I might go right here.
Michael: (controls his rising temper) You will not go right here.
Origami (child): You'll have to help me change my pantie-…
Michael: GOOOOOOOOO! Go in the bathroom! (Origami gets the messages and goes go off on her own, but whether or not it was to actually go potty was unclear) … *sigh*… (looks up at the ceiling as if talking to somebody) When does Empty Nest start?
Coming Soon to a Fanfiction Site near you!
As you can probably tell, this was mainly just for shits and giggles, but it does include a few original ideas that I will be tackling in the full version. I'll be posting the Yuzuru lewd next, it's just with my job and other real life stuff, as well as other works I currently have active; its hard to balance it all out.