LADIES, GENTLEMEN, AND SKINWALKERS THAT WANT TO TAKE OVER THE WORLD, I HAVE COME WITH A QUERY!
Alrighty, gents. Pretty soon, I'm going to be getting deployed overseas and, until things settle in, I'm probably not going to be able to update the story for a while. But goddamit, have I come up with some heinous plans for the plot of this story. As it's been a while since I updated, I want to write another chapter for this story before I head out.
HOWEVER! I wanted to get you guys opinions on something before I do so. Feel the room out, so to speak.
Chapter 12, the one with Ciaran and Velka discussing things, has been a bit of a mixed bag with you dear readers out there. Granted, I wrote that chapter as a bit of a pastime before I was sent off to a brief military event, and it's not exactly that it's my worst work of writing; it's just that I've started to look at it and question if I perhaps jumped the gun a bit on velka's feelings towards Kaylen.
Sure, I want there to be a showing of attraction between them possibly, but I somewhat feel I might have reduced her from "Warrior Goddess with years of experience dealing with the vilest and powerful people within the kingdom" to "lovestruck goddess who overthought a wet dream."
Again, I don't think it's a "bad" chapter, but after reading how I wrote Gwynevere and the butterflies I got from that, I feel like I can do better than what i put out.
As Chapter 12 is relatively short and I didn't include any interactions that would alter the plot of the following chapter, removing it and writing something following the chapter with Gwynevere and Kaylen. Maybe delve more into showing Velka as a more focused and stern woman, with a minor soft spot, as she investigates more into Kaylen's background. I already have the details of Patches finding his "information" on Kaylen, so it wouldn't be too much to just follow from that.
But I'm just! Not! Sure!
As I said, I've come up with BIG plans for thing to go on with Gwynevere and Kaylen with the Duke. So I'm somewhat conflicted if I should stay focused with them or give writing about Velka's efforts another go. (And maybe show the reaction other gods like Ornstein, Gwyn or Gwyndolin have to realizing Gwenevere made Kaylen go with her to her rendezvous with the duke. There is definitely a lot that could be touched on if I wanted.)
So I decided to just get feedback from you guys on things and see how the crowd feels. Should I go for the retry on thing or am I overthinking it and should let it stay as is? As I'm trying to get another chapter out before I'm deployed, second opinions are welcome.
P.S. Godzilla is the goat- wow, gwynevre being nice who would have thought but then it gets balanced with her massive ego fishing for compliments. W chapter def an improvement over the previous chapter. I gotta say author for velka being your favorite female your not doing her justice like your doing with other characters
My Response- SIR! I'd be a liar if I said that reviews like this aren't a reason I was like "Wait...did I write gwyenevre better than best girl Velka? This is an outrage! I gotta up my game!" XD
Also, for the record, King Ghidorah is the goat! Godzilla always needs help when going against my boy! :)