Hey everyone it's been a while hasn't it? Sorry about that. I'm also sorry that the next chapter might be a bit delayed, a few keys on my keyboard haven't been working, the One especially which means I can't use '!' (I copied this in) when a character is excited or shocked. I also can't use esc or tab though those don't affect my writing.
Anyways onto reviews.
Crazy Girl Writer chapter 42 . Mar 31
So I've read the story again with the updates and i have seen the many reviews you responded to about some inconsistencies in your story (i thought origjnally it was slytherin castle taht was gonna be the orphanage but now its emrys, etc). Yeah I noticed them as well but aside from making me question my sanity it doesn't really draw away from the story, they were like side notes not main plot points. As a fellow writer a piece of advice I would give is for you to go back every so often, especially after a long hiatus, and read your story to yourself. One it would help with refreshing the plot in your mind and helping to see what you've already written and point out any errors etc (a few words sound the same but are incorrect ie shoots and ladders is supposed to be chutes and ladders). Again I don't think that deters from the story or plot it's just a note.
I do have a question about a few characters:
Hermione - I'm confused on how you are portraying her. It seems when you write her pov she really believes "harry" needs her and her help and she had abysmal people skills and does care about him. There has been no input I guess on her side about money or how she is only friends because of that. To me basing on what you've said and a few preconceived notions that she has a huge authority figure worship and no interpersonal skills, almost high functioning autistic in a way. I don't know I guess if you get a chance can you clarify her for me?
Madam pomphrey - is she gonna do anything about her moment of realization? She was like oh my how did I get like this? And then nothing.
Neville - what happened with easter and his blood inheritance test? . You set it up around christmas in the story and then nothing
Sirius - again you set it up around Christmas and again nothing what happened has he been in a time dilation since then cause that's months which would be like 100 yes lol
A few follow ups I'd also like are:
Is she the winner of the triwizard tournament or not?
Was the gift from lupin everything it seemed or would a "solemnly swear I'm up to no good" reveal some hidden surprises?
Oh I had more but I forgot
Anyway thanks for updating keep up the good work.
Me: This is a big review with a lot of questions, I've answered this privately but I also wanted to respond here since I'm sure others are curious for the answers too. Firstly, thanks again for the tips. Now onto your questions
Hermione-Well she's always been a bit hard for me to write. I love reading bashing stories, in most of those stories, I read Hermione gets paid and believes that Harry wouldn't be anything without her there. Her being slightly autistic would be interesting to write to help explain some of this but I wouldn't want to offend anyone by getting things wrong.
My little brothers are both on different spectrums of the autistic scale and my mom actually mentioned she thinks I might be slightly autistic as well. But Hermione is much different from me and my two brothers so I wouldn't know how to write her without offending anyone if I made her autistic.
Madam Pomphrey- I'm going to work with her later on in the story don't worry. She's still stewing over what she's done.
Neville- Not going to lie, I totally forgot about his test. I'll need to fix that in a future chapter. Maybe say he couldn't get away during easter so they rescheduled it for during the summer instead. That makes sense. Thank you for reminding me.
Sirius- He didn't actually go into the time chamber around Christmas, he went in around a week or two after the second task which was in I think February? (Correct me if I'm wrong I didn't double check) He's been in there for so long because he has a lot of damage from Azkaban and needs help to get over his childhood trauma, grudges against Slytherins, James, and Lily's deaths, Peter betraying them, and Remus abandoning him. He has a lot he needs to figure out.
He's underweight, sickly, has severe trauma, and needs constant help from a Mind healer to help him learn to live with everything. The time chamber has also been set so that not as much time passes inside as it did for Adriane. Maybe for every day he spends three days in the time chamber. This means he's been in there for (Assuming it was in February he went in) around fifteen months.
Don't worry he'll be out soon hopefully.
Yes, Adriane is the Triwizard winner, it's just no one could corner her to let her know about the prize and whatnot so she didn't think about it.
Sadly the gift from Lupin was actually just a defense book for second years, he got the idea of giving her that book from Dumbledore.
If you think of more questions you want to be answered please let me know and I would be happy to answer them. Just leave a review and I'll answer/get back to you.
jeremiahkelley93 chapter 42 . Mar 29
Great chapter. Is the story over?
Me: Nope it's not over until the fat lady sings, though I should rethink those words since the fat lady does like to sing a lot in Harry Potter.
Anyways other than a Joke I will admit I considered ending this at the last chapter and starting a new book with Adriane going through life in gothem and eventually winding up dealing with problems from the DBZ side of the world, eventually I decided not to.
Onto the story
Adriane woke up the next day with a smile on her face. She was free, didn't need to pretend to be 'Harry Potter' anymore, and could finally be herself. Sure she would still need to hide her powers if she didn't want someone trying to kidnap her to experiment on her or try to kill her, she had enough of that for a lifetime thank you very much. But she was willing to hide her powers if it meant that she could show the rest of herself.
She quickly jumped up out of her two-poster bed and started getting ready for the day. She grabbed a light blue blouse with ruffles on the sleeves, a pair of skinny jeans, and some black knee-high boots before rushing to the bathroom to change and get ready.
She brushed her hair while spelling her teeth clean to save time before getting dressed. She let her normal looks come back, her black hair was once again flowing down her back and her eyes sparkled emeralds. She smiled in the mirror after she was done getting ready before leaving her bathroom and bedroom.
She hummed to herself wondering what she should do now, she could send a letter to her cousin asking if they could meet up soon so she could meet him in person but he had a busy life so he wouldn't be able to get time off to come to meet her right away. She also really wanted to explore a bit of Gotham and see what the town she moved to was like.
She hummed to herself wondering what she should do now, she could send a letter to her cousin asking if they could meet up soon so she could meet him in person but he had a busy life so he wouldn't be able to get time off to come to meet her right away. She also really wanted to explore a bit of Gotham and see what the town she moved to was like.
Deciding that she would spend some time exploring she left the house before realizing that she would probably need to hire a butler or somebody to drive her around. She was still fourteen for a few more months and even if she was fifteen, Adriane was pretty sure you needed to be sixteen to get your driver's license in America.
Looks like she was walking into town, she would ask Bruce if he knew of any good people she could hire later when she actually met him.
She spent an hour just walking into Gotham, she hadn't wanted to call a cab because in this town you never know if the cab driver will try to rob you or not. After she got to Gotham she spent some time wandering around until she came across the Gotham Gardens and decided to go in. She walked in and gasped in awe at the sight in front of her.
The place seemed to be brimming with plant life of all kinds, flowers of all different kinds. Roses of all different colors, lilies, pansies, and tulips filled the flower beds. There were several bushes all around, including a few lavender bushes.
The trees swayed in the breeze and seemed to be welcoming Adriane into the garden, beckoning her to come closer. She took a deep breath, enjoying the fresh air of the garden before she walked deeper into the garden. She walked until she came across an old gazebo-type building.
It looked to be a mix of a greenhouse and a gazebo but it looked overgrown. Vines were growing up on every side of the building and onto the roof. A few parts of the roof looked to have been broken and then repaired several times making Adriane worry for the plants inside. She might not be the best at taking care of plants of any kind, the title of best gardener and herbologist went to Neville, but she wasn't a slouch.
It was one of the few chores the Dursleys made her do that she actually enjoyed doing. Of course, she couldn't let them know so she learned from a young age how to act like she hated something.
Anyways that wasn't the point, the point was she wanted to check on the plants inside and make sure they were okay. From what little she knew of Gotham, not many people would care for the plants out of sight like the ones in this building would be.
She carefully walked into the building and gasped in shock at the sight of all the different kinds of plants inside. Several looked like some strange magical plant she had never heard of before.
Adriane felt her pound in excitement as she walked closer to one, before whispering to it, "You're so beautiful, god Nev would love you."
She made sure to keep her hands away from the large maybe magical plant, she had no clue if it was poisonous or not and didn't want to mess around and find out.
She was so preoccupied with watching the plants in awe that she didn't notice someone was watching her with curiosity brimming in bright green eyes.
The eyes belonged to a woman who was five foot two. She had bright ruby-red hair that had flowers woven into it but that's where any hint of her being a normal human ended. Her skin was a light green pigment and she wore clothes that were made out of leaves and vines. She had some black knee-high boots on.
Her leafy shirt was cut low so a person had a good view of her modest chest and her leafy pants seemed to be painted onto her body, showing off her curves.
This woman's name was Pamela Isley or better known as Poison Ivy. This woman was one of the major rogues in Gotham. She recently broke out of Arkham again and just got back to her babies to see someone walk in. She was prepared to kill the girl if she hurt her babies but paused as she noticed that the girl looked familiar, it didn't hurt that she was looking at Ivy's babies in awe.
Ivy frowned and silently lowered herself down to the floor with a vine before hiding, she sneakily crept closer where she had a good look at the girl's face and felt her poisoned blood freeze when she recognized the eyes and face belonging to the girl.
Adriane was enjoying herself, she knew that Neville would kill her if she didn't get pictures of the new plants for him and cursed the fact that she didn't bring a camera. She vowed to come back soon with one. She didn't want to call for Dobby or Winky to bring her a camera because she didn't want to risk any muggles seeing them.
She spent a bit more time in the garden with the beautiful plants before leaving with the feeling of being watched. She figured it was some worker watching her to ensure she didn't hurt these one-of-a-kind plants that they were clearly working hard to protect and grow.
After walking around for a bit more she decided to go home wondering how things were going in England, the first article must have come out by now. She wished she could have seen Dumbledore's face when he first saw it.
In England a few hours earlier.
Dumbledore sat down at the head table, savoring the peace and quiet that was so rarely afforded to him. He knew his staff was doing the same as him but it was tinged with sadness. His eyes turned to look at his Potion's Master with a sad frown. The man's ghost was glaring around the hall, Dumbledore wished he knew what had caused every death eater to die at the same time.
He had tried to corner Harry, he had a feeling that the boy knew something but the blasted brat managed to avoid him. No matter, he would make sure the boy told him when Dumbledore rescued him from the Dursleys after his birthday.
Just then owls flew into the great hall delivering the mail, he paid the delivery owl before unfolding his paper. The headlines had him spitting out his lemon-flavored tea, his favorite kind of tea.
BOY-WHO-LIVED ABUSED? DUMBLEDORE IS TO BLAME!
Dear readers, I wish this headline was a lie but sadly it is no joke. Our precious Boy-Who-Lived has spent his entire life being abused, what makes this even worse is that the Headmaster of Hogwarts Albus Dumbledore has known about this and done nothing.
This reporter went to the town that our boy hero grew up in to interview his family and a few of his neighbors, and what I found out was shocking.
Everyone is aware that after the Potters died for their son that Albus Dumbledore took the Potter Heir away, saying he had placed him somewhere safe where he would be loved and cared for. My readers this is a lie.
The headmaster left the newly orphaned child on his muggle aunt's doorstep, discarded like you would an old butterbeer bottle when you're finished with it. Heir Potter was fifteen months old at the time, he could have woken up and started walking around trying to find his parents.
My dear readers, the thought of a newly orphaned Boy-Who-Lived, who had just lost his parents and saved the entire Wizarding World, walking around in the dead of night looking for his parents that would never be there for him, why it breaks this reporter's heart.
After his aunt found the young toddler on her doorstep, you would think she would take the poor thing in and love them like she would her own son, Heir Potter's age, correct? I'm sorry my dear readers but you would be wrong, this vile woman shoved the poor boy into the cupboard under the stairs of their four-bedroom home and made it the boy's bedroom for the next eleven years
By the time the Boy-Who-Lived was three, he was being treated worse than a house elf. He was forced to do all the chores around the house, the cooking, the cleaning, the gardening, anything these vile people could think of he was made to do. All the while these monsters refused to feed him any more than table scraps.
You would think if these people hated the Potter Heir so much they would have jumped at the chance to be rid of him for most of the year when his Hogwarts letter came correct? Wrong, my dear readers, these vile monsters tried to keep our hero away from his proper place in the world, in our world where he rightfully belonged, and burnt every single letter that was sent.
Headmaster Dumbledore eventually sent the groundskeeper, Hagrid, to tell the Potter Heir what he was. My question dear readers is this, why was the Groundskeeper who isn't even allowed to do magic sent instead of a proper teacher who would be able to protect the Boy-Who-Lived much better?
Our sources say, at the end of Heir Potter's first year he told the Headmaster about the abuse he faced and begged him to let him stay at Hogwarts during the summer or let him find some other place to stay, somewhere safe in the magical world, with us And the Headmaster Albus Dumbledore refused, stating that the Vile Monsters who harmed him truly loved him and that the poor boy was lying before sending him on his way to the train and back to the home of his aunt's to be abused and neglected for another summer before school
What else has gone unknown? I vow to dig into this and report everything I find dear readers, we have a right to know if the Headmaster of our school supports child abuse. Written By: Rita Skeeter.
Dumbledore was furious and horrified at what was in the paper. He quickly looked at his staff who were all staring at him in disgust and horror, he stood up. "This is all a big misunderstanding I assure you, I'll go have a talk with Miss Skeeter." He then turned and walked out of the great hall and into his office.
How did that woman find out about this? He made sure to erase the memories of anyone who found out that the brat was abused. It was for the greater good that his weapon was beaten down and submissive, this way he would look at the Headmaster as his hero and do anything for him. Even if it meant marrying Ginny Weasley or dying on his command to defeat Voldemort.
How was he going to turn this so he looked good again?
I just noticed that I haven't put my ongoing stories list at the bottom of the last several chapters, I'll start doing this again.
Harry Potter and the Secret Inheritance. Status Active. Chapters 43.
Ember Potter and the Secret of the Gems. Status Active. Chapters 21
Crystal the Half Ghost Witch. Status Active. Chapters 8
One Shot Heaven. Status Active. Chapters 2
(Note each one shot is a different story on AO3, it's still a one-shot but they are by themselves and not in a book like on FF.)