A/N: Hi everyone, I hope you're all doing well, and I wanted to post this update chapter to tell you that the hiatus is now officially over!
I'm so glad I spent the last few months giving the first several chapters some well-needed updates, as parts of them made me cringe a little bit when I looked back at them, especially using my own voice in the narration, as well as making cheesy jokes. But now I feel like I am a much better writer than I was nearly three years ago when I started writing Chaos on Earth.
I've already updated the chapters now, so if you've read the original chapters before, I highly recommend that you go back and read through them again, because I made several major changes to them, which I will list the majority of at the end of this chapter after the review replies (so that you don't accidentally get spoiled).
I know it's been more than two months, and I'm sorry it took so long, but I was a bit lazy. However, when I saw that I was approaching the end, I was working at Sonic speed, if you will. ;) And I want to say that the chapters are so big that I almost crashed the site a few times copy-pasting them in! XD
But on the bright side, with the extra things I added to the chapters, the word total of the first thirteen chapters has gone from 231,012 to 258,779. That's 27,767 new words! And there may or may not be an extra scene or two in there ;)
It wasn't too hard to update the chapters, especially when there was a noticeable quality increase in chapter 11. But the hardest chapters to update
I want to thank Thedarkestnight51, BurnSienna, DarkSonic21, PowerKey, Neo Gem Rose, princeartemis900, Blu17, TheGamingAssassin, VirusChris, CapitalClassShip, brightsquid, spyrofan34, BarianHunterAlpha, and Game for life for favoriting and following since my last chapter! And a special shoutout to DoomFox for favoriting and following too! They are part of the r/milesprower subreddit and Discord server!
With that being said, let's move on to the...
Wait, hold on, how many reviews did I get...?
puts on glasses, checks number of reviews
Oh my goodness... 20 reviews! Thank you so much guys! I think that's the most reviews I ever got after one chapter! Thank you all so much!
Anyway... let's move on to the reviews and what matters most: the updates!
SuperTailsFan0812
Thank you so much :) The moment with Chris and Sonic was probably my favorite part of the entire epilogue, and I wanted to make it as heartwarming as I possibly could.
And even though Tails is a hero in his own right, he is still 8 and needs the support of his friends when he is emotional. And Cream does too, they may be heroes, but they are still kids.
It's true, you are one of my top readers :) And it's okay that your review is shorter than usual. Sometimes the best reviews are short reviews.
See you in Season 2 as well!
GuardianDragon98
Yeah, that was really rough, but everyone is safe in the end. And yes, I have hoge plans for Season 2 and the Chaos Saga, and I can tell you that it is epic!
stardust902
I decided it was for the better than I don't have Matt replace Chris. I have a few more appearances planned for Matt, including why he is in Minnesota to begin with, but after that, his story is done for the most part.
As soon as I read your review, I went back to fix the typos, the inconsistency, and the wrong speaker. Thank you for pointing them out! And it's okay, you're not nit-picking. You're helping to make my story even more coherent and better :)
D.J. Scales
This is just the beginning :)
CreativeKitty975 (chapter 23)
Thank you so much! And yeah, Chris and Sonic went through an awful lot during that battle, but I think it brought them together much closer as friends than ever before.
jurassicdinodrew
All I will say is I have my own plans for the Homebound Saga ;) And I sure hope that we'll get a happier ending than the original anime.
azzyofhyperdeath
:)
SX-000
I agree! XD "Long time no see" is totally a Sonic thing!
Chances are GUN didn't hear Sonic trying to warn them that Chris was trapped inside the Egg Fort II, but that doesn't explain Rouge risking punishment. That's probably because she was disobeying an order and breaking protocol, but... GUN is not really known to be forgiving for the most part. Here's hoping Rouge will get away scot-free.
Looking back, I can't believe I was serious about those plans for the story. I'm so glad I'm going to stick to the actual episodes. However, I am going to take a creative liberty later on, but it will help to explain something that wasn't really explained when you compared it to the mainstream Sonic lore.
No, sadly, the S.O.N.I.C.X. organization is not going to appear that I know of, but I will say that it makes for a great standalone Sonic X story idea.
Now that's actually a thought... If I do have Metal Sonic appear, I may actually have him in his Neo form. I'm not sure about permanently though, but I will definitely take that into consideration.
I love writing Eggman in this story! Up there with Sonic and Chris, he is one of my favorite characters to write. And I am looking forward to episode 67 too, so there's that :)
To be honest, if I were to have Infinite appear, I would never have considered making him amnesiac. It's one thing for Shadow to be struggling with the loss of his memories, but Infinite is a whole 'nother ball game!
Animation Adventures
As much fun as I have writing intense scenes, it's nice to be able to breathe and relax :)
Yeah... Chris really went through an awful lot, so hopefully he gets a chance to relax.
I think you will be glad to know that I went through the first thirteen chapters and did my best to make the dialogue as casual and not-formal as I possibly could. It was a little tricky, but I'm pleased at the result. Eventually I'll do it with the other chapters too.
I couldn't live with myself if Matt replaced Chris :P However, I am going to take a creative liberty for a future story that might explain something.
I actually had a cameo in mind :) I'm not sure where I'm going to put it though, but I'll think of something.
CVGWJames
Thank you :)
dianapinto19041
The story will continue from here, as per the original Sonic X, but it may be a little bit different than what you might expect :)
dbehi1
These are some cool ideas :) But a note for next time, I think it would be better for you to share ideas for your own stories in the PMs rather than the reviews section.
Franco Almiron
I might not add Sonic Prime elements to my story, but oneshots, I will definitely take into consideration.
CreativeKitty975 (chapter 24)
I felt like Season 1 was missing an epilogue, and that's why I wanted to write one, to tie up a bunch of loose ends.
You can expect quite a few surprises in season 2 :)
Bakuganman
Hi Bakuganman! Long time no see!
And that actually made my day when you said that, like, I don't think I ever thought of how impactful having an out-of-control Super Sonic would be. It really means a lot to me.
Rest assured I went back to fix as many grammatical issues as I could find in the first thirteen chapters.
Now that I think about it, I may actually change Knuckles' vision completely when I eventually go over the other chapters, because I don't see how it makes sense either. In fact, I had to wrack my brain to find another explanation. And to be honest, I didn't think about the Master Emerald existing across all of time and space.
And I'm super glad no one's getting cloned!
sadly, I am not going to have the second Master Emerald anymore, but it is still a very interesting concept that could actually merit its own story.
Rock-connaissance! XD
iron maker2
Sadly, I might not use too many other characters besides the Chaotix, and I am not going to use the IDW characters because this is kind of a separate universe from IDW, but as for the others... I'll leave it at that.
snake screamer
I too am glad I'm not cloning anyone, as that's just silly. And I literally can't wait to write the Metarex episodes!
I might not have too many more Mobians appearing on Earth, but I do have a few specific ones in mind. However, if the second Chaos incident went on any longer, it's possible that more Mobians could appear.
Impostor182
I do love writing long chapters, don't I? XD
VirgoDragoX
Hi Virgo! I was blown away by your review! :D And thank you so much for reviewing and going in-depth, it means a lot to me!
I thought some parts of Sonic X were a little bit cringe too, and as much as I like it for what is, I really wanted to make it better.
And OH! We have SECTIONS for Characters, Plot, and even Theory! I'm hyped!
I agree, stories are not just about the plot, but about the character too! And I am glad I grounded Chris, not to mention writing scenes in his POV to get his thoughts on everything.
And it's really cool that Chuck gave you Back to the Future vibes! I haven't seen those movies yet, but I will definitely do that some time! And I am glad I grounded everyone else's personalities too.
I might not have Danny, Frances, and Helen go to Mobius in this story, but it does make for a great standalone story idea :)
I am really glad I had this version of Sonic X take place after Forces! And I really wanted to have Dark Sonic appear more than just his one appearance. And I enjoy writing the grounded personalities of everyone that makes them more... human :) And Eggman is one of my favorite characters to write too!
Even though Sonic X episodes are confined to a time slot, I have no time and length limits because this is a fanfiction :) And I really enjoy seeing how I can change up the plots to make them better and more life-like.
Episode 17 was a really great episode with a lot of potential, and I am really glad I tapped into that potential!
I seem to have a thing with writing really long chapters :P And I really loved writing those last three chapters! And I too was amazed at how long The Last Day turned out to be. :)
Oh boy! I can't wait to hear your theories as I post new chapters! :D
And I will definitely update the AO3 version with the new chapters right after I post the new chapters here!
Guest
No, sorry, I don't think I will add the Hard-Boiled Heavies to this story, but I like your idea anyway!
And also, PowerKey asked me this in my PMs:
Hey, have you ever thought of having either Tails or Chuck build Chris a Power Suit so he can fight alongside Sonic and the others?
I kind of don't want to overpower Chris, because that could make him a Mary Sue, but Chris will still be able to help out in his own way.
Disclaimer: This update is not certified by Eggman Industries, and normally we would not be liable for any damages Eggman causes, but believe me, he'll find a way to make us liable for them.
Chapter 25
Episode 0
The Wait is Over - The Long-Awaited Chaos on Earth Returns‼
Update Chapter
General Changes
- Mr. Stewart's personality is being changed and given a facelift to the 90's kind of teacher every middle schooler dreams to have.
- Chris is more shy for the most part.
- Any paragraphs or lines that doesn't contribute to the plot have been either kept to a minimum or removed.
- I took my own voice out of the first-person narration because it breaks the immersion.
- Any references to Overlanders is changed to humans.
- More stutters are added to be a little more realistic.
- Capsule Carriers are changed to Egg Dropships to be more uniform with later chapters.
- Some references to Dr. Robotnik are changed to Dr. Eggman.
- Time stamps have been added to all chapters, just like the ones in the later chapters.
- My custom anime titles have been incorporated into the titles too.
Chapter 1: Gotta Go Fast
- The Tails' POV and Sam Speed's POV scenes are changed to third-person.
- In the climax scene, there used to be quick jumps between first and third person. This has been split into three scenes.
- The entire scene with Helen driving home has been removed due to a time inconsistency.
- The police officers are less casual.
Chapter 2: Big Brother
- The sympathy from Sonic was too full-on, as well as too early.
- Sonic and Chuck don't speak to each other using the infrared scope, as there is no signal.
- Chuck and Chris go straight home after the bowling trip instead of going to Arby's due to a time inconsistency.
- The events of this chapter and Chapter 3 are now on the same day instead of different days for coherency.
Chapter 3: I Am the Eggman
- Amy's cloak is removed.
- An OOC bit with Knuckles is fixed.
- The Egg Pawns are replaced with a SpyBot.
Chapter 4: The First Emerald
- Mr. Stewart is more casual.
- The entire cafeteria scene has been removed because it doesn't make sense.
- As mentioned before, the two Egg Pawns are replaced by a spy drone from SatAM. As such, the two men at the construction site are removed, and the entire scene with Knuckles destroying the Egg Pawns is omitted.
Chapter 5: Citadel
- I realized that Ella could easily have seen the Tornado in the driveway.
- The original scene where Chris was remembering Matt is made way more subtle and is not used as a plot point anymore.
- I added a little more emotion to the end of the chapter.
Chapter 6: Chris' Family
- The part where E-51 is instructing Badniks is removed.
- As per a review suggestion, I changed up Sonic's fight with the Buzz Bombers and Buballs so that it's not all Homing Attacks.
- I boosted the emotion toward the end of the chapter.
Chapter 7: Reunion
- I removed a part about the Phantom War that did not contribute to the plot.
- Instead of having Ella remain suspicious of the Mobians when Tails and Amy ran through the room, I had her faint instead.
- Sam Speed's personality has been given a facelift.
- Mr. Tanaka has been removed from the climax, as he is still driving Lindsey to the airport.
Chapter 8: Dead Air
- Upon request, I reduced the number of times the number of satellites is mentioned. It was three or four times before, but now it is just one time.
- The entire flashback with Matt is removed, and I changed it into one paragraph.
- The Thorndykes' cable provider is no longer Comcast.
- I added two comfort scenes in the scene where Tails and Chris were working on the Tornado, and the second one is based on an idea from SuperTailsFan0812. Thanks for the idea! :D
- This is by far the biggest change in the first 13 chapters. I removed Chris from the climax of the episode and rewrote the entire battle with the Super Sweeper to focus on Sonic and Tails.
Chapter 9: My Sweet Passion
- The dialogue has been changed so that this is Chris' first time in the X-Tornado.
- The reference to Sonic Forces in the scene where the Nautilus attacks Sonic has been removed.
- I increased the comfort between Chris and Tails.
Chapter 10: Home Run
- I made Tails more shy when he first meets Albert.
- I added a few lines between Sonic and Albert.
- Eggman no longer mentions Chris when talking to Chuck. Instead, he compliments Chuck.
- I felt like Elmer was a little out of character in his first scene, so I tweaked his dialogue.
- I boosted Sonic's pep talk with Chris.
Chapter 11: Special Forces
- I hope this is not controversial among Sonic fans, but I changed GUN's abbreviation "Guardian Units of Nations" to "Guardians of the United Nations", as this is the Earth version of GUN, and it shows one of the differences between Earth's GUN and Mobius' GUN. They are still called the "Guardian Units of Nations" on Mobius, though.
- I edited a few of Topaz's lines to keep her more in character. This goes for Chapters 12 and 13 too.
Chapter 12: The Attack Begins
- I did my best to make the government characters a little less formal.
- I used some of SuperTailsFan0812's ideas, and wrote a brand new scene with Tails at Tingalin Villa.
Chapter 13: War in the Pacific
- I made the injuries a little worse at Tingalin Villa, especially Frances.
- I used even more of SuperTailsFan0812's ideas, and wrote in a comfort scene for Tails after the battle.
- The narration in the Sonic's POV scenes are more grounded.
A/N: And that's the majority of the updates! Let me know what you think of the updated chapters, and if there is anything you feel should be changed, please let me know.
And one last thing, I want to tell you that during the hiatus, I have already started work on chapter 25 (episode 27), and it is about 20-25% done. I plan to have it out next month! :)
The wait is over! Season 2... begins now.
