Hello just a new chapter and thanks to review i am trying to change my writing style and if this one is better or not and should I do something else tell me

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BoombaTheSaint No,it is a wish fullfillment story when MC go to New World right now I am trying to make an image of his character and way of thinking and also practice my writing skills to know is writing style i using was good or not which turn out to be terrible and as far as unsuffurable is concerned i don't know about you but i will be screaming my lungs out or if i had little bit more control on my emotions may be curse and questions my views on reality a hour or more if i am in MC situation and no i was not being a sheep it was honestly first thing that come in my mind so I just get done with it . Is it generic? yes does it change anything for future plot? Nope , as for butterfly effect it's not like their be no butterfly effect even with just by existing he will make butterfly effect small or not and i am not saying their will be no changes it's generic with start but I don't just write without having any thoughts on what should I write in future and please tell me how many fanfic's have MC'S deliberately going around screwing the story Knowing or unknowingly and then reacting like 'ohh my god why is demon king here isn't he should be fighting with hero and be killed by him 'and why it didn't happens like original story was because he stolen money from a old man who was supposed to save and raise hero after his parents died in monster or bandit attack but he stole his money so old man died of starvation and hero was eaten by Wolf's and lastly i am trying to improve my English writing that's why I am writing this story not other way around and grammar it's my third language it's not even second so as far as I am concerned if it understandable and make sense does it even matter? But I highly appreciate your honest thoughts. Thanks man.

MC POV

In a large room filled with various types of exercise equipment to facilitate different kinds of workout, occupied by only one occupant.

"23,24,25,26,27,28, 29 and that's 30 making it a full set of 3 times " 'Huff' it is surprising to believe where I come from to my current state " standing in front of a full body mirror nearby and flexing his muscles " Truly glorious compare to my previous life body even though I had a good fit body at that time too but compare to this body my previous body pale in comparison " he muttered under his breath

Suddenly, a knock on the door grabbed his attention. "Come in," he said. Opening the door, a middle-aged man in a butler's outfit entered.

" Excuse me Sir, your weapons instructor is waiting for you for your spear throwing practice," the butler said.

"I need some time to cool down my body before I come, but I'll be there in half an hour. Is there anything else you wanted to inform me about? Arnold" he asked the butler with curiosity.

"Indeed sir, I have found a game company attempting to create a DMMORPG with the same qualities you mentioned previously."Butler from now on identified as Arnold replied

"! Really, Arnold please inform my instructor that I will be taking today off and I want to sponsor this game developer team and invest in this project take the money from my funds and if it's possible try to arrange a meeting with this game company CEO and development team. I want to speak to them in person "

" Sir if I may inquire why are you so interested in this game as far as I am informed this company is not that much famous or known for anything special"

"Potential Arnold - I see potential in this investment; that this small investment will yield me more than triple the profit."

"Tell me is it is not the first time some gaming company is trying to create a game with aim of providing as much freedom possible for it's users with a Deep dive gear no less and as for suffering masses who are have nothing good going on in their lives, this game will provide them a temporary escape from their grim reality and they will hooked on this game like a addict with drugs ."

Arnold with a thoughtful and worried filled face said " Sir, I understand your strategy and way of thinking but what will you do if it didn't yield as much profit, did you prepared any contingency for such a situation " Arnold asked with a calm and polite demeanour

"Arnold, Please relax. You have been working as my personal butler and assistant for over a decade now, so you know that I am not one to spend my money recklessly or take unnecessary risks. Even if I were to acknowledge your concerns, it wouldn't be a big deal. However, if my investment pays off, I will make a significant profit. Therefore, there is no reason for you to worry".

Arnold's eye's filled with remource, bow's down "Sir, I Sincerely apologize for my blunder , I understand the severity of my offence and just want you to know that I only wishes to provide you and your family a satisfactory service to best of my ability "

"Arnold their is no need for you to bow, I know that you were just doing your duty as my retainer and you are not just a servent, you are also part of my family"

"Now stand up and show me that Sincerity and Honesty filled eye's of yours "

Arnold overwormed by emotions , clean his flowing tears and composed himself

" Sir , I am very grateful for your kind words but I must enquire is their anything else you need which might require my assistance"

"Now that you mention, How is work of opening of new branches of Orphanages and production of newer models of affordable gas masks and polluted air filters is going on?"

"Sir, I am pleased to inform you that the construction of the new orphanages is progressing well. All necessary facilities will be completed and fully functional within the next three months. Additionally, I am happy to report that new gas masks will be available for sale starting next month."

"However, I regret to inform you that there has been a delay in the delivery of the air filters production. This delay has been caused by a terrorist bomb blast that targeted one of our ships carrying hardware and software components from India via the Strait of Malacca, disrupting the transportation chain. We are currently doing everything we can to recover as many personnel and materials as possible."

"Furthermore, the situation in China is also unstable due to a civil war, which makes transportation from there very challenging. As a result, the next shipment of air filters hardware and software parts will arrive in four to five months from India."

"Well, it can't be helped; we just have to wait for the next batch of shipments and give the deceased sailors a proper burial. Also give their families financial compensation and provide healthcare support for twenty years. Additionally, if they have any children in their family, Provide them with full educational support until they graduate from college. This will improve my public image and I will be resting in my room today. Please do not disturb me unless it is absolutely necessary."

Arnold bowed and replied, "Very well, it will be done." Arnold then exited the room.

He then after completing his workout goes and take quick shower in the attached bathroom to the gym room, letting warm water pour down on his body and clean it and provide much needed relief to his aching muscles after finishing shower , he wear a soft and comfortable bathrobe and goes to his room and enter the room and falles on the bed ,under a soft blanket and thinking ' I am just too tired and happy to care about anything for today at least ' After relaxing on bed for sometime.

Opening his eyes, while still lying on his bed looking at the ceiling and saying softly " I still can't believe that you are finally here my ticket out of this dying world Yggdrasil "

" I have been preparing for this moment for all these 15 years. I have been learning human resource management, royal etiquette and speeches, multiple different kinds of Martial arts and handling of various kinds of medieval and modern weapons, although not to the level of something like a grand master, but enough to give anyone run for their money."

"Not to mention those long books on how this bloody war started which left this world mostly a toxic wasteland and under that all mountains of theories and accusations. Who would have thought it all started because of a drunken couple who couldn't wait to get home before making out and starting banging each other on the control panel of a nuclear weapon's missiles and ofcourse pressed the button, which launched a nuclear missile straight to Europe and started World War 3. It was quite anticlimactic and when I found out about this fact, I was more than disappointed."

"This war caused massive-scale destruction of lives, infrastructure, and the economy; the consequences of the war can even be seen today , if one compares the amount and speed of scientific and of technological progress between before the war and after it (except for weapons, communication, and medicine). There is almost no progress in any other sector; if anything that has risen, then that is cost of living, which causes many children to be abandoned by their parents, which is both saddening and beneficial to me."

"Not only does this allow me to make a profit off of their needs and create a positive image within the community, but by setting up these orphanages, I can create a large brainwashed group of people into my personal army, my retainers, and put them on key positions of society for me, ensuring I never have to worry about being stabbed in the back. Although it may be considered a bit evil but, As the saying goes there is no such thing as a free lunch"

"Not to mention I created my own independent corporation in Kyoto, albeit not as big as my father, but it's big and powerful enough to have full control over Kyoto. It primarily focuses on creating products for basic living and devices such as nutrient pastes and gas masks etc, Pharmaceuticals, and Medical devices. Compared to other companies, my company provides relatively good working conditions for its employees, which, although could be considered normal or even basic by 20th century standards . This has made competition for jobs within my company quite fierce."

"In the end, all these things are just a means to an end."

"Which is going to New World while becoming as much powerful I possibly can because New World is filled with dangerours and unknown creatures and I have to be wary of other Player's that get transferred to New World "

"I remember all the names of Player's who got transferred to New World and got a mention in Overlord"

"First known Player's group was composed with Surshana an Undead Overlord with eclipse class like Ainz and very likely a level 90 to 100 at end of Yggdrasil and another Player name Alah Alaf nothing else is known about him exept his name and Kikotenshin Nekonyan a human Player with knight,paladin and holy knight known classes as he is most probably filled the tank's role in a party and maybe have classes in golem making and other 3 unknown players which combined are known as Six Great Gods by New World denizens and 4 of them were from humans race and exept for Surshana other's passed from ageing so second non human player was either from demi human or Heteromorphic non-ageless race "

"Next group of Player's was Eight Greed King's they were group compose 7 males and one female, one of their players was named Hougan, father of that trash elf king and their guild base was a flying castle name Eryuentiu . Their is nothing much useful known about them"

"Next an unknown Player with one of the 20 WORLD ITEMS who was killed by Deep Darkness Dragon Lord "

"Next was The Leader of the Thirteen Heroes and one of his companions . The leader name can be Riku used by PDL (Platinum Dragon Lord) and other Player was maybe was a half-demon with 4 swords so he can be a hybrid which in original Yggdrasil would be balance braker for example a half angel and half skeleton undead hybrid, It just makes undead's one of the biggest weakness into strength and angel weakness like attack from acid or darkness don't work on undead to begin with which would have break the balance of the game, So he most probably had a Asura job class or atleast have a Racial or job class with similar effects afterall he need four hands to wield 4 swords simultaneously ,if he was a Player to begin with"

" And lastly Minotaur Sage a being who was said to be strong enough that with just one swing of his axe could create tornadoes or split the mountains"

"They were the only Player's excluding from Ainz and Nazarick which were transferred to New World mention in Overlord atleast as far as I know, Other notable figures which I should be wary of are Dragon Lord's, DRAGON EMPEROR ,BLACK SCRIPTURES ,Other God Kins , Infamous individuals who carry a myth of their own like GOBLIN KING ,Sealed Evil Tree with name orignate from H.P Lovecraft work, other possibleliy existing Eldritch beings like SHUB-NIGGURATH AND DARK YOUNG and Residences Of Central Continent which most likely are of higher level then the people of part of area where Overlord story starts and lastly TALENT HOLDER'S are the most unknown factors if their is a talent exist to bypass any weapon restrictions so who can say their is not a talent which have ability like Longinus "

"Well no use worrying about it right now. It's getting late anyway , so I should stop monologueing to myself and go to sleep after all their is more work need to be done."

End

I have made some changes in this chapter to know if this better now so i re-upload it again

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