Well.. if you wanted to know where i disappeared for over a year now, now you know. This was my first story that was supposed to be the first of its kind;a self insert instead of, ya know. a nearly blatant one being the commander instead of being the grunts themselves AkA the shipgirls.
Why, did you ask? Well. the problem is that with my accumulated writing experience. there are a lot of errors that really need to be corrected, Another was that I'd come to note that my personality wouldn't have fitted the quiet, but violent angle part of the beginning, Then there were issues with my armanent, which would have been quite something to work with and too inflexible. It just doesn't reflect the fact I would probably be shy and afraid of getting killed as a shipgirl, which shouldn't come as a surprise;I'm just someone doing this by inspiration after all.
Segwaying into the next flaw has to be the fairly long slow burn after being found by Azur Lane, as well as being too ambigious about the top brass and the interior workings of the Sirens themselves. To put it bluntly, it's like slamming my head against reinforced concrete while trying to delve into how the Sirens, a force working with WW2 technology yet in the form of revolutionary human-sized shipgirls have managed to survive against the modern world without being bombed back to hell back and forth.
Still, i'm going to continue working on the rewrite (All things considered, it should be complete by the end of this year). The next chapter immediately after should kick off with a battle that goes badly for me, But still. I do want to complete this story, and for it to reach its conclusion. After all. it's the first of its kind. isn't it? I do hope i can make it worthwhile someday.
There are two options for me, Do you want me to overhaul everything. or to continue on but modify where needed?
And yes, the sirens will still be explored upon. Just because they're a WW2 force doesn't mean they had to use WW2 technology, They're not idiots. as stagnant and lax as they can be for the top leaders and R&D (Yes, they love to use R4Ms and HVARs with velocities exceeding their real counterparts and even shaped charges meant for use against both attack aircraft and shipping. No, they're still working on modernization like developing the Zuni rockets. No, they're been working on the 35mm GDF, 25mm Oerlikon (For both planes and shipping, mind you) and 57mm M1948 projects because the L/60 bofors or Oerlikons are just atrociously bad against even something like a A-10 even if you jacked up their muzzle velocity by 20%, let alone trying to shoot down a anti ship missile. Yes, they will begin to develop forgotten things like the Zeus HEDS guided round and a hypervelocity rocket project that i will not spoil for now. Yes, they've suffered thousands of casualties and many more in just a year that would account to over one million deaths if converted to real ship crews-the buggers are just that determined in a world war. Yes, they will begin to play catch up as soon as they learn about the magnitude of my existence that ironically lets them catch up to a modern force). There will also be questions about how large they are and what exactly their land forces are like or what their homeland or culture is like. which again will be explored in the next chapter from a newborn kanmusu's perspective.
And don't worry about PURPLE SHIFT:That one will too undergo a rewrite, though I'm considering starting over as Little renown rather than Little enterprise since Renown fits my fighting style much more other than being just a carrier (It will also focus more on epigenetics and body hacking, and the questions of evolution).
So, What do you prefer? Let me know.