Sorry for my bad English.
Something I think to be a mistake in making a history is when they rush the plot. The Volume 5 got a lot of criticism, and most I see were bad ones, and I had to agree with some points of those reviews on Youtube. One of the things I agreed with is that they rushed the plot to make everything happen too much faster.
I really did not liked the fact Yang's mental recovery regarding her missing limp went so easy. Or about the fact Oscar was easily convinced to go to Mistral despite a voice inside of his HEAD told him to do it.
I wasting time with this because I am fighting against myself to not do the same with this history. When I first thought about this fiction, I already got a lot planned ahead, and I think I'm not the only one who do that. I am just curious about how the readers will react to my ideas.
But I know that is a mistake to rush the history just to see what the readers will think. I saw some authors who tried to rush their histories in the end and the final was a bit disappointing. The histories need their time to be developed, and when rush at the end, the mind not work properly.
Something I think happened with the last season of Samurai Jack.
I try not take too much time between the chapters but I not plan to rush the plot, not matter how much I want. I already tried something with my fic based on my OCs and this was a mistake since there is no much readers interested in stories based on OCs.
After witness in first hand Jaune's combat capabilities, and with the first battle of the Challenge coming, Ryan knew that he needs to help Jaune with his skills. The only way he knew to help his partner to become a better fighter is the way his mentor trained him.
Silver Chariot was a man of few words but his actions speak louder.
After a deal, he agrees to train Ryan since his father had no interest in doing.
Jaune remembers Ryan seeing he would help him to improve his skills while in Beacon, and seeing how strong he is Jaune would accept do anything Ryan would tell him to do to become stronger. At first, he thought Ryan would instruct him to do some ranch chores and those chores would at the same time train him as he saw in some movies.
But all Ryan told Jaune to do is swing his sword into the nothing make a while now.
-Are you sure this will help me improve? -Jaune felt he needed to ask.
-You said that know the basics already but this "know" may mean two things. -Ryan explained. -The know of "I already know because I trained" or the know of "I already know because I saw how to do it".
-What do you mean?
-I saw you swinging your sword make a while already and seems that your moves are based in what you saw only, not by instruction.
-And what makes you say that?
-Your legs are too much close to each other. You did not keep your shield raised when you fought against Cardin. You lowered your blade while still in battle. You have a terrible leg play. Must I keep going?
-No. -Jaune said bitterly. -But since you use pistols...
-Revolvers.
-Right... since you use revolvers, how come you know the basics of sword fighting?
-You already forgot that I used your sword for a short period of time while inside of the Behemoth? -Ryan let out a deep sight before continue. -One of the only things my father decided to teach to me is one weapon that I need to know how to use, even if just a little is a sword. We both know the basics but I felt that I know more than you do about putting the basics in practice.
-And I felt that was not your father who teach you how to use a sword.
-Yep. The one teaches me the basics of sword fighting was my mentor.
-You had a mentor?
-You could call him that. Since my father refused to teach me how to fight, I had to find someone who could, that is when I found Chariot.
-Chariot?
-Silver Chariot. People knew him for walking around the desert with a heavy armor, which is not very healthy by the way. After a deal, he agrees to teach me what he knew.
-That's nice and all, but you father never teach you to not talk to strangers?
-No.
Jaune did not know why he still surprised at this point.
Yet, Jaune listened to him. Even if he was similar to Jaune in various ways, Ryan is a fighter better as Jaune want to be, and if Chariot made Ryan be the fighter he is today, perhaps if Jaune practice the same way he may grow stronger in little time. The time was passing and the first duel of the Challenge would come soon.
He needs to be prepared.
The next lesson for the day is more swings with his sword.
Different from the last time, Ryan tied Jaune's hand into a branch so he needed to force his arm to make a swing with his sword. Every time the sword went down the branch would pull Jaune's arm back.
Ryan told to him repeat the motion as much he could.
Jaune felt his forehead sweating from the moves he was making, and hope this to be a sign that the training was working.
The next thing Ryan planned was, I bet you saw this coming, cover Jaune's eyes and give to him his shield.
The training was simple. Ryan will tell to Jaune what part he will hit with a foam baseball bat and Jaune just has to use his shield to block the incoming attacks.
-Left leg. -Jaune heard Ryan say and then he felt something his left leg. -Right knee. -Again he heard and again felt something hit him. -Head.
-Ouch.
-Left arm.
-Ouch!
-Stomach.
-Oof!
-Right wrist.
-Ow!
-Jaune why are not blocking?
-I know you said to me that would say where you was going to strike but why I'm doing this with my eyes covered?
-From what I could see, you seem to not move your shield to block the incoming attacks. I mean, I saw you blocking Cardin's mace with your sword instead of your shield.
-So you are trying to make me react to the incoming attacks?
-That's right, and one more thing.
-Yes?
-Head!
-Ouch!
To end the training session, Ryan was actually shooting Jaune at his legs. If someone was to joke about making him dance, they would but Ryan just gave shot after shot and Jaune screamed after each blow close to his legs.
-Remind me again why are you doing this?! -Jaune asked.
-You have a terrible leg play, so I trying to make you improve a little. -Ryan answered.
-Leg play? I let you know that I have sevens sisters, so dance is something I already know.
-So why did you not used those moves while fighting?
-You want me to dance while fighting?
-Why not? I saw Weiss doing this in the combat class.
Stopping to think about, Jaune remembers to see Weiss moving a bit like she was in some ballet show. This is something Jaune never thought before. He really could use some moves he learns while dancing to help him improve his leg play?
-Ryan, I may already know the answer but your father did this to you?
-Yes. Why?
-I'm a little surprised how easy you are doing this while you already was in my place.
-The difference is that I don't want to shot you.
Why Jaune keep asking.
End of the chapter.
Not so much. I just wanted to show some ideas I have for some training. At first I wanted to make something I see in every media I can think. From movies to animes. One of the options was to use gravity dust to make Jaune's body heavier to train his strength like in Dragon Ball, or actually make him do some chores to train while working like in Karate Kid.
Then I decide to make something original since I just want to be more original possible. If my ideas would work or not I really don't know but I wanted to make Ryan help Jaune to improve since Pyrrha was the one who helped him in the original plot.
That's all folks. See you next time.